In class we have been writing a report about something I like. I decided to write about rugby union because I love to play rugby. First I planed my big idea, then I researched the information I needed for my topic. Then I wrote each paragraph about each new idea.
Please read my report and leave me a comment about how I can improve.
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Here is a picture of my topic rugby union. Please see my report by pressing report with the under line.
Hi Daiki
ReplyDeleteI really like your report about rugby because you have so many good facts about rugby. Rugby is a good sport to play and it is a good running sport too. I am getting to know more about rugby. Do you play rugby?
Hi my name is Jeremiah and I go to Waikowhai Primary School and I am a year 4. I really liked how you added lots of information to your paragraphs for each new idea. It made it interesting to read. Something you could improve is make sure your sentences make sense because I spotted some sentences don't make sense. It reminds me of when I watch rugby on the television. What inspired you to play rugby?
ReplyDeletehope you have a great day, blog ya later. :)
Hi Daiki, Wiremu here. I really enjoyed reading your report because it was so interesting. Something you could improve is your spelling because you spelled some words wrong. Anyway it was fabulous.
ReplyDeletehi Daiki, Noah here. your story is like the best.maybe you could put who you play for but it was still the best.
ReplyDeleteKia ora Noah!!!
DeleteThank you for commenting on my blog and thank you for saying that I am the best. I play at Western Springs for the Ponsonby club. My position is the half back or the lock.
Good bye.